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The line grapgh shows the past and projected finances for a local quthority in New Zealand.

The line graph compares the financial situation of a New Zealand regional authority between 2012 and 2020.
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 the rates of revenue and user charges are predicted to increase, borrowings and grants and studies will remain much lower. Rates revenue started the
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 at 20 which was the highest among the four items. After remaining steady for the first three years, it is expected to climb to 40 in 2020. Borrowings show a fluctuation pattern. It started the
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 at 5 and after an initial rise from 2012 to 2015, it will plummet to a low of 2 in 2016. It levelled off from 2017 to 2019 before peaking at 50 in 2016 and will finish the
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 at around the same level that it began. Grants and studies were the lowest among the four in 2012, and it is predicted to rise gradually and exceed borrowing briefly in 2015, before finishing the final year at 4, the same level that it began the
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