The graph below shows the contribution of three sectors - agriculture, manufacturing, and business and financial services - to the UK economy in the twentieth century. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the contribution of three sectors - agriculture, manufacturing, and business and financial services - to the UK economy in the twentieth century.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given graph provides information about the
impact
of three specific areas that influence The United Kingdom's budget during the 20th century.
Overall
, agriculture and manufacturing experienced a drop in numbers and lost their leading position by the end of the period.
While
business and financial services showed sharp growth and multiplied their numbers. In 1900 the most powerful sector was farms, they had exactly 50 per cent of the contribution. In the next 50 years the number grew but after 1950
impact
of agribusiness considerably fell and constituted less than 5% of the total. At the same time, manufacturing was in second place at the beginning of the estimated period. Its deposit was around 45 per cent ,
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in the next hundred years there was a steady decrease in figures and production retained 2nd position with about 15% of the
impact
.
In addition
, business and financial services were in absolute minority in 1900, they brought in less than 5 per cent of all incomes.
Nevertheless
, in the next 100 years , the
impact
of
this
type of contribution dramatically went up without fluctuations and became the most valuable sector by the end of the period reaching nearly 45%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Comparative analysis
  • Declining trend
  • Agrarian economy
  • Fluctuations
  • Industrial advancements
  • Recessions
  • Significant growth
  • Service-oriented industries
  • Dynamic economic structure
  • Traditional sectors
  • Modern service-based sectors
  • Urbanization
  • Technological advancements
  • Global market integrations
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