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The chart shows the number of international students studying at a UK university between 1995 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows the number of international students studying at a UK university between 1995 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The escape of the Brazilian boa constrictor earned Harry his longest-ever punishment. By the
time
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 he was allowed out of his cupboard again, the summer holidays had started and
Dudley
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 had already broken his new video camera, crashed his remote control
airplane
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aeroplane
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, and, first
time
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 out on his racing bike, knocked down old
Mrs.
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 Figg as she crossed Privet Drive on her crutches. Harry was glad
school
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 was over, but there was no escaping
Dudley
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's gang, who visited the house every single day. Piers, Dennis, Malcolm, and Gordon were all big and stupid, but as
Dudley
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 was the biggest and stupidest of the lot, he was the leader. The rest of them were all quite happy to join
in
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Dudley
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's
favorite
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 sport: Harry Hunting.
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 was why Harry spent as much
time
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 as possible out of the house, wandering around and thinking about the end of the holidays, where he could see a tiny ray of hope. When September came he would be going off to secondary
school
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 and, for the first
time
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 in his life, he wouldn't be with
Dudley
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.
Dudley
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 had been accepted at Uncle Vernon's old private
school
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, Smeltings. Piers Polkiss was going there too. Harry,
on the other hand
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, was going to Stonewall High, the local public
school
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.
Dudley
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 thought
this
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 was very funny. "They stuff people's heads down the toilet the first day at Stonewall," he told Harry. "Want to come upstairs and practice?" "No, thanks," said Harry. "The poor toilet's never had anything as horrible as your head down it -- it might be sick."
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 he ran
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 before
Dudley
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 could work out what he'd said. One day in July, Aunt Petunia took
Dudley
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 to London to buy his Smeltings uniform, leaving Harry at Mrs. Figg's.
Mrs.
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 as bad as usual. It turned out she'd broken her leg tripping over one of her cats,
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words time, dudley, school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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