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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectronic povert station summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectronic povert station summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant
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The diagram demonstrates the process of producing
electricity
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 in a hydroelectric power station. it is seen that
this
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 process has generally five stages and is a simple process that requires a range of equipment and machinery.
The first step is
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 that
water
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 goes to the high-level reservoir and is stored there.
this
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water
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 will be controlled by a dam which is open during the
day
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 and closed at night. during the
day
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 when Dam opens
water
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 flows to turbines and generators operate and produce
electricity
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.
subsequently
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,
electricity
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 is shared by powers line into National Grid,
whereas
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 in the nighttime,
water
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 is pumped up from the low-level Reservoir to the high-level reservoir through reservable turbines.
To sum up
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, a hydroelectric power station can generate
electricity
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 at different times
day
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 time it uses the National
Water
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 energy from the river and at night it transfers the
water
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 to create and store the energy for the next
day
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.

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