The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given line graph represents the amount of money that was spent on books by four different European countries over a ten-year period from 1995 to 2005. It is evident
by
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the statistics that there was an upward trend through those years.
At the end
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period
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Germany stood at
first,
next it was France
then
Austria and
last
, there was nothing except Italy. In detail, in 1995 France spent 80 million dollars on books which was the top score.
On the other
hand
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Germany's record was only 30 million.
Although
expenses got raised from 1995 to 1999, Italy didn't do the same way.
In addition
, 2001 was a trigger point for Austria. Its number faced a notable rise. In
fact
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between 2001 and 2003 Austrians brought 20 more million.
However
, Germany was on the other side of the page
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and experienced a slight decrease in number. All in all,
also
according to
the data there were a lot of ups, and downs, in a long time what is obvious is, aside from the fluctuations expenses had been raising in the long term.
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