The line graph compares the average visitation figures for patients in four categories who went to clinics at a specific hospital weekly between 2010 and 2016.

The line graph compares the average visitation figures for patients in four categories who went to clinics at a specific hospital weekly between 2010 and 2016.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line graph compares the average visitation figures for patients in four categories who went to clinics at a specific hospital weekly between 2010 and 2016.
There were nearly 250
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related to birth control in 2010, a figure which rose to a peak of 275 by 2012, before a sharp decline to 175 in 2014, and a complete recovery to its starting figure by the end of the time surveyed.
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to the doctor concerning eye issues started lower at 125,
grew
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and grew
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negligibly over the next two years, prior to surging in the final four years to a high point, relative to all
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, of 350. Diabetic and dental
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were consistently less common with the former beginning at 60, rising steadily to plateau under 100, and finishing the period with a sharp uptick to 175. The latter began the period higher at 100
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, fell to half that number in 2012, more than recovered to 125 in 2014, and grew marginally in the final two years recorded.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
Vocabulary: Replace the words visits with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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