some people say History is one of most important school subjects other people think that, in today world, subject like science and technology are more important than History

Some
people
say that among all the school
subjects
history
is one of
major
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subjects
in schools.
On the other hand
, some
people
say that the
subjects
that are related to
science
and
technology
are more dominant than
history
.
History
is past, and
past
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the past
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is related to the things that have been done. So
history
teaches us from
the
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past mistakes. So,
history
teaches us from the past mistakes that have been done in any field and we can learn from them.
Whereas
,
science
and
technology
made our lives easy by all means. In the past
people
have to travel for
week
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to reach their destination, but
science
and
technology
makes
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it far easy by
airplanes
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aeroplanes
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,trains,buses,cars and bikes. The travel that can take weeks in the past is now taking some hours.
History
is a subject
that is
able to consistently reminds us about the struggle of our ancestors. The struggle for independence. The struggles for keeping the countries safe.
Moreover
, some
people
are very fond of reading
history
books
,
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and learning about their culture and customs.
Science
and
technology
are the
subjects
that
keeps
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us connected to the modern world. Children can learn
technology
and by the influence of
it
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,it
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they can make their
carriers
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careers
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in
this
.
Science
and
technology
also
enables
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us to compete with the modern world by observing
the
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inventions and experiments. In conclusion, my opinion is that it is complex to prioritise one of these
subjects
over the other. I think that both of these
subjects
had their importance in our lives. We just can't ignore one of these
subjects
beacon of the other.
Science
made our lives easy by using
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modern
technology
and
history
is a subject that keeps us connected to our past.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial
  • comprehend
  • retrospect
  • gain insights
  • reflect on
  • sharpen
  • evaluate
  • significance
  • heritage
  • legacy
  • advent
  • breakthroughs
  • sustain
  • sustainability
  • revolutions
  • empowered
  • overcome
  • transform
  • advancements
  • collaboration
  • cooperation
  • diversity
  • fulfilling
  • promote
  • facilitate
  • prosperity
  • enhance
  • foster
  • foundation
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