The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth.

The diagrams below show the life cycle of the silkworm and the stages in the production of silk cloth.
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The charts illustrate the life stages of the silkworm and the phases in the production of silk cloth.
Overall
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, it can be clearly seen that the life circle starts with leaving eggs by silk-butterfly and finishes by making a swathe.
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, in the second graph, from swaddle is made into silk cloth which is done by complex actions.
According to
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the first diagram, after 10 days as soon as leaving eggs, there occurs silkworm larvae in the mulberry leaf which is considered to be their sustenance. In the third stage, silkworm starts to envelop with silk thread after 4 and 6 weeks.
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, in the
last
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life period, silkworms become cocoons and after 16 days it hatches as butterflies with small wings. Meanwhile, swathe goes through selection,
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this
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puts in the boll.
Following
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, the cocoon goes through an unwinding process with a distance of about 300-900 metres thread.
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, it twists and weaves,
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follows with the dying procedure.
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