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The charts below show the percentages of male and female students getting top grades in 1960 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the percentages of male and female students getting top grades in 1960 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts provide information on how much percentage of grades Male and Female students obtained in different
subjects
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 in two time periods (1960 and 2000).
Overall
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,
Men
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 were excellent in
Science
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 and
Maths
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subjects
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 compared to Women in both years
whereas
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, females were better in Arts and Language
subjects
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 than
Men
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. In the year 1960,
Men
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 dominated the
Science
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 and
Maths
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subjects
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 with approximately around 32% and 30% respectively
while
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 Women were relatively less than 11% in both
subjects
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.
However
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, Females turned out to be better in Arts, Languages and Humanities
subjects
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 which were considerably higher than 30% and the highest of all was around 45% which no Males ever got in their academics.
Furthermore
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, since 2000 the statistics have dropped for
Men
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 in
Science
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 and
Maths
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subjects
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while
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 the Humanities subject was outperformed by males by touching the peak of more than 40% compared to Women.
In addition
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, Female performance shrank in almost all the
subjects
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 in the year 2000 only in
Science
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 subject it grew by 1% and in
Maths
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 subject it was at the same percentage.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words subjects, men, science, maths with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentages
  • top grades
  • achievement
  • gender disparity
  • educational trends
  • academic performance
  • comparison
  • decade
  • educational policy
  • societal expectations
  • improvement
  • educational attainment
  • graduates
  • academic excellence
  • statistics
  • educational landscape
  • benchmark
  • parity
  • gender roles
  • historical data
  • performance indicators
  • educational improvements
  • longitudinal study
  • scholastic achievement
  • gender gap
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