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The pie charts below show responses by teachers of foreign languages in Britain to a survey concerning why their students are learning a foreign language. The first chart shows the main reason for learning a foreign language. The second chart shows how many teachers felt that there has been a recent change in the reason.

The pie charts below show responses by teachers of foreign languages in Britain to a survey concerning why their students are learning a foreign language. The first chart shows the main reason for learning a foreign language. The second chart shows how many teachers felt that there has been a recent change in the reason.
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The pie charts illustrate the survey results conducted in Britain to reveal the opinion of foreign
languages
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teachers
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 about their students’ motivation on attending their classes. The first chart shows the common factors that attract pupils to learn languages
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 the second chart displays the recent changes in those factors perceived by the
teachers
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. It can be clearly seen that there are seven categories which the
teachers
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 consider as the main
reasons
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. They are - having a foreign partner, travel, business/work, buying properties overseas, general interest, social contacts and personal development. To start with, based on
teachers
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’ perceptions, business overseas
trip
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 and travelling were two domineering
reasons
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 for pupils to learn other languages.
However
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, most of them agreed that there were different changes for both. More and more
teachers
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 thought that business purposes were the major
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reasons
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reason
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besides
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 the others, but the percentage of those choosing travel as the main purpose fell dramatically from 33% to 3% of the total percentage.
Subsequently
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, there were 7 % of
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who
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agreed that
social
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the social
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 contacts factor was the main reason, and it even doubled recently.
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, even though 7 % of
teachers
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considering
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 personal development as one of the main
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, 3 % of them agreed that it was not valid anymore.
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, general interest and foreign partner which was thought
as
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 the minor factors has not changed at all. Interestingly, 15 % of
teachers
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reporting
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reported
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 that there were no changes for all of the categories
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considered as the main reason for students to study a foreign language.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words teachers, reasons with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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