The provided graph represents women unemployment in the UK, especially in four of its countries. Now, turning to the details, the comparison is only between 2013 and 2014.

The provided graph represents women unemployment in the UK, especially in four of its countries. Now, turning to the details, the comparison is only between 2013 and 2014.
The provided graph represents
women
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women's
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unemployment in the UK, especially in four of its countries. Now, turning to the details, the comparison is only between 2013 and 2014. As
it
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apply
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can be seen from the data , every other country ended up
by
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with
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decreased
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the decreased
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amount of jobless
female
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females
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,
besides
Scotland, it had a rise
up
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of up
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to 6.7
percent
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per cent
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. It is worth noticing that Wales and Northern Ireland had the
most low
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figures compared with the other two.
Therefore
the outcome of twenty fourteen was eventually less
as
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in twenty
thirdteen
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thirteen
. The
more
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most
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employed from all four countries was
the
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apply
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Ireland , with the results a little more than 4.5%
The
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apply
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England and Scotland
shows
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considerably high percentages at the beginning and a little less or even
dramatically
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dramatic
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growth of female
unemployement
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unemployment
at the end
. It is obvious that two of them made a good decrease,
however
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,however
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the other two were
steadliness
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steadiness
or worse.
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