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Bar chart provides female unemployment rates in the four countries of the UK.

Bar chart provides female unemployment rates in the four countries of the UK.
#bar #unemployment #rates #four #countries #uk
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Female
unemployment
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 rates in the four
countries
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 of the UK. The bar
cyart
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chart
cart
snows
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shows
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 the
unemployment
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 rates among
women
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 in the
countries
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 that make up the United Kingdom,both in 2013 and in 2014. The has generally been a small decrease in female
unemployment
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 rates from 2013 to 2014,
expect
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except
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 in Scotland. In two thousand thirteen,in Northern Ireland,indicators
swowed
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showed
 that four-fifths percentage of
women
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 were unemployed.And it is believed that the only country with the least unemployed
women
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 showed
fifths-four
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a fifths-four
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persentage
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percentage
 in Weles. But in two thousand fourteen ,unemployed
women
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 decreased in both
countries
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.In Wales, it decreased to five zero
persentage
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percentage
,and in Northern Ireland to four-sixths
persentage
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percentage
. In 2013,England had the largest increase in
women
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's
unemployment
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 increased by 6,8%.But a year later,in 2014,it decreased by only 6,5%.
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,Scotland recorded 6,1% of
women
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's
unemployment
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 in 2013,but in 2014 it increased by 6,7%, making it the highest
unemployment
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 rate among
women
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among
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in
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 these four
countries
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.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Change the first paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words unemployment, countries, women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the first paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bar chart
  • female unemployment rates
  • four countries of the UK
  • 2013
  • 2014
  • introduce
  • overview
  • describe
  • summarize
  • observations
  • comments
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