The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited attractions of Brighton between 1980 to 2010

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The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited attractions of Brighton between 1980 to 2010. From 1980 to 2010 the favourite attractions of visitors were the

pavilion

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and the festival. The least popular

attraction

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in 1980 was the pier but

after

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apply

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2010

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,2010

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the lowest

attraction

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was the art gallery,

also

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the highest famous

attraction

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was

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pavilion

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the pavilion

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. There are two basic general trends downward and upward.

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regards the

first,

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the

incomes

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income

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for

Festival

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the Festival

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significantly decreased over the years, it declined from 1988 to 5%. The number of tourists who visited the pier

also

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fluctuated from nineteen-eighty to two thousand, and

then

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visitors doubled from 12% to 22% between two-thousand and twenty-ten. The

Pavilion

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attraction

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's visit of tourists rocketed between 1985 and 1995 from 28% to 48% and

then

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percentage

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the percentage

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gradually decreased to 31% in the next 15 years. It is noticeable that incomes for the

Pavilion

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higher

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are higher

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than the incomes for the

piers

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Piers

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".

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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words pavilion, attraction with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

159 words

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The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited attractions of Brighton between 1980 to 2010

some children spend hours every day on their smartphones. why is this the case? do you think this is a positive or a negative development

Some people like to try new things, for example, places to visit and types of food. Other people prefer to keep doing things they are familiar with. Discuss both these attitudes and give your own opinion.

There is an increasing trend around the world of married couples decding not to have children.Discuss the advantages and disadvantages for couples who decide to do this.

Modern technology now allows rapid and uncontrolled access to information in many countries. This is a danger to our societies. To what extent do you agree or disagree?