The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited attractions of Brighton between 1980 to 2010
The line graph below shows the percentage of tourists to England who visited attractions of Brighton between 1980 to 2010.
From 1980 to 2010 the favourite attractions of visitors were the
pavilion
and the festival. The least popular attraction
in 1980 was the pier but after
in Correct word choice
apply
2010
the lowest Add a comma
,2010
attraction
was the art gallery, also
the highest famous attraction
was pavilion
.
There are two basic general trends downward and upward. Correct article usage
the pavilion
At
regards the Change preposition
As
first,
the incomes
for Fix the agreement mistake
income
Festival
significantly decreased over the years, it declined from 1988 to 5%. The number of tourists who visited the pier Correct article usage
the Festival
also
fluctuated from nineteen-eighty to two thousand, and then
visitors doubled from 12% to 22% between two-thousand and twenty-ten.
The Pavilion
attraction
's visit of tourists rocketed between 1985 and 1995 from 28% to 48% and then
percentage
gradually decreased to 31% in the next 15 years. It is noticeable that incomes for the Correct article usage
the percentage
Pavilion
higher
than the incomes for the Add a missing verb
are higher
piers
Capitalize word
Piers
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