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The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows female unemployment rates in each country of the United Kingdom in 2013 and 2014. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The illustration represents information female of jobless in the United Kingdom. At a
glance
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 we can grasp that in the first picture, England has
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more female
unemployment
 than other countries. In Wales, everything is in perfect order, it doesn't have many
joblessness
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 women. What pleases me
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 Scotland has quite a lot of nonemployment women, in 2013 it was 6.1% and in 2014 it increased by 0.6%. Northern Ireland had 5.6% in 2013, after which the percentage of
unemployment
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 women decreased by 1% in 2014. England
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 the highest female
unemployment
 rate in 2013 than Wales, Wales has the lowest female
unemployment
 rate in 2013. The lowest
unemployment
 rate in 2014
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 Northern Ireland
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 and the highest in 2014
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 Scotland as a whole not
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Linking words: Add linking words.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words unemployment with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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