The line graph shows the percentage of different age groups of cinema visitors in particular country.

The line graph shows the percentage of different age groups of cinema visitors in particular country.
The line graph illustrates the proportion of
people
in four different age brackets who visit the cinema in a specific nation between 1978 and 2008.
Overall
,
it is clear that
all four age groups showed a similar pattern throughout the
period
, except for the percentage of
people
who aged more than 50, which increased
at the end
of the
period
.
Also
, it is noticeable that the rate of visitors who are 35 to 45-year-olds
people
and those older than 50 became the same in 2008. Looking at the graph more closely, one can see that the proportion of youngsters between 14 to 24- year-olds hit a low of about 75 per
cent
in 1988 before recovering to its initial rate in 1978 which was 90 per
cent
, and remained constant for 5 years and fell by 10 per
cent
at the end
of the
period
. A similar pattern was seen in older
people
who are in the age bracket of 35 to 49, decreasing 10 per
cent
over the given
period
in question. Meanwhile, after dropping by 20% during the first 10 years, the percentage of visitors aged 25 to 34 rose slightly, which was just a 10 per
cent
rise and descended minimally, reaching roughly 65% in 2008.
In contrast
, for the elderly who are older than 50, even though there was a dip between 1978 and 1988, the rate went up moderately
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and peaked at 50% in the
last
year of the
period
.
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