The graph below shows the contribution of three sectors- agriculture, manufacturing, and business and financial services- to the UK economy in the twentieth century. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates the contribution of each selected sector to the economy of the UK in the twentieth century. The three chosen sectors are agriculture, manufacturing,
and
business and financial services.
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Overall
, it is apparent that there is a decline for
farming and manufacturing during the century.
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On the other hand
, the office-work services seem to be steadily increasing. When looking at all the grouped bars together, it's visible that the distribution has gotten a bit smaller.
The first two time frames are quite similar to each other. The agriculture bar is moving around the 50% mark during the 1900s and 1950s whereas
the manufacturing bar is moving around the 40% line. At that time, the business and financial services are still a fraction of the sections with less than 10%.
In the third and fourth quarters of the twentieth century, the business and financial sector is picking up the pace and the contribution first jumps to around 20% and then
later to just under 40%. At the same time, agriculture drops to 10%, which makes it the lowest contribution.Submitted by fabio.haussener on
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