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The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2000 and 2010 summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant

The charts below show the proportions of British students at one university in England who were able to speak other languages in addition to English in 2000 and 2010 summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant
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The pie charts demonstrate comparative data on the proportion of British
students
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 at a specific university being able to speak in other languages apart from English in 2000 and 2010.
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Spanish only
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 and Other
language
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categories
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 experienced growth with
Spanish
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 only remaining in the highest proportion. Both
students
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 that did not know other
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language
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languages
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 and those who only knew French declined in number whilst the proportion of German only and
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 with two other languages remained constant. Among those
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 that increased in percentage,
Spanish
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 raised from 30% of
students
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 in 2000 to 35% in 2010.
Spanish
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 was favoured by university scholars during the whole period. The category that
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 experienced a rise in percentage was "Another
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" which saw a 5% rise between 2000 and 2010 (15% in 2000, and 20% in 2010).
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, which had a decline in number, included "No other
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". The chart shows a 10% decline in participants favouring
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 option, reaching 10% of
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 in 2010. French was another branch that saw a decline in percentage with 15% in 2000 sitting at 10% in 2010. German
language
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 and two other
language
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categories
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 remained constant during the decade with both items standing at 10% both in 2000 and 2010.
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