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Nowadays people make new friends through social media and internet chat groups. Some people think it is a good idea. Other think that face to face interaction is essential. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #friends #media #internet #chat #groups #idea #face #interaction
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There are two opposite arguments about
communication
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 in social
media
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. The first opinion about
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 is good for them
however
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 the other side thinks to have face to face
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interaction
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 is important. I think the second argument is quite good enough to communicate clearly. Using social
media
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 for
interaction
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 is the trend nowadays because of the increase in technology. Technology makes us can communicate with others in different areas. The advantage of social
media
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 is cheaper than traditional
communication
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. Unfortunately, there is some fraud on the internet especially in social
media
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. We can talk with somebody who using a fake account.
Interaction
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 in social
media
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 can not be clear because we can not see clearly the gesture and faces of our friends. Social
media
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 use the internet for the
media
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 so it can be delayed when we talk with somebody. Traditional
communication
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 is face-to-face
interaction
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. We must have time and sometimes cost if we want to do
this
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 type of
communication
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. The advantages of
this
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 are we can know clearly the objective of the sender and we can give our response fastly without delay. We can see the
interaction
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 between the mother and her children, there is bonding between them and the mother knows the goal of that
communication
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. I think it is the best idea to keep
interaction
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 face-to-face. In recent times, we can not forget to interact with others face-to-face not only on social
media
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 because we are humans who is the social person that need others in our life.
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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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