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Nowadays people make new friends through social media and internet chat groups. Some people think it is a good idea. Other think that face to face interaction is essential. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There are two opposite arguments about
communication
 in social
media
. The first opinion about
this
 is good for them
however
 the other side thinks to have face to face
while
interaction
 is important. I think the second argument is quite good enough to communicate clearly. Using social
media
 for
interaction
 is the trend nowadays because of the increase in technology. Technology makes us can communicate with others in different areas. The advantage of social
media
 is cheaper than traditional
communication
. Unfortunately, there is some fraud on the internet especially in social
media
. We can talk with somebody who using a fake account.
Interaction
 in social
media
 can not be clear because we can not see clearly the gesture and faces of our friends. Social
media
 use the internet for the
media
 so it can be delayed when we talk with somebody. Traditional
communication
 is face-to-face
interaction
. We must have time and sometimes cost if we want to do
this
 type of
communication
. The advantages of
this
 are we can know clearly the objective of the sender and we can give our response fastly without delay. We can see the
interaction
 between the mother and her children, there is bonding between them and the mother knows the goal of that
communication
. I think it is the best idea to keep
interaction
 face-to-face. In recent times, we can not forget to interact with others face-to-face not only on social
media
 because we are humans who is the social person that need others in our life.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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