The two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992. Employees and self-employed: by sex and occupation, 1992

The two pie charts below show some employment patterns in Great Britain in 1992.

Employees and self-employed: by sex and occupation, 1992
The pie charts illustrate the proportion of
males
and
females
working manual and non-manual in the United Kingdom in the year 1992.
Overall
,
it is clear that
there was a higher percentage of women in non-manual work,
while
manual work is more popular among men in British. Look at the detail, nearly a quarter of
males
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Craft or similar
whereas
there are few women enjoying
this
work, just only 3%.
In addition
, there was least in the figure for both sexes which stood at 2% and 1% for
males
and
females
respectively.
The
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Other manual,
males
and
females
had a relatively similar more than a fourth in both genders. Clerical or related were chosen by the most
females
, with approximately 31%;
in contrast
, just already 6% of
males
joined
this
occupation. The largest data of
males
and
females
was Managerial and professional, standing at 36% and 29% respectively.
Finally
, the Other manual’s statistics were relatively the same which was more than a fourth in both genders.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words males, females with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 2 times.

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