The two pie charts give information on the propotion of males and females in employment in six general categories in 1992, they divided into manual and non-manual. Manual occupation includes Craft or similar, General labourers and other manua

The two pie charts give information on the propotion of males and females in employment in six general categories in 1992, they divided into manual and non-manual. Manual occupation includes Craft or similar, General labourers and other manua
The
two
pie charts give information on the
propotion
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proportion
promotion
of males and females in
employment
in six general categories in 1992, they divided into manual and non-manual. Manual occupation includes Craft or similar, General labourers and other manual.
While
non-manual
occupation
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occupations
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are Managerial and professional, Clerical or related and other non-manual.
Overall
, it can be noticed that women prefer non-manual work,
whereas
men choose manual
labor
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more. In the first diorama, it is clearly seen that non-manual
employment
exceeds manual
employment
.
For example
, Clerical or related
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up the highest
percentage
, i.e. 31%, followed by 29%
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from Managerial and professional, and the lowest one was Other non-manual with nine
percent
,respectively. In general, non-manual work in the female chart is 69%, which is more than doubled by manual one. More specifically, manual
labor
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in women's
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as a whole was 31%, twenty-seven
percent
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of which is Other manual
labor
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, 3% was Craft or similar, and only
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percent
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was General labourers. In the second graph, there is not as big a difference between
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types
of
employment
as in the first. To be more precise, manual
labor
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accounted for 52%, in the manual
labor
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part other manual had the largest
percentage
, 26%. Followed by Craft or similar with 24%. And the smallest
percentage
was general
labor
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, only
two
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, respectively.
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Managerial and professional accounted for the highest
percentage
with 36%, and
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had 6% each.
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