The line graph shows the consumption of fats between 1971 and 1997.

The line graph shows the consumption of fats between 1971 and 1997.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The line graph shows the consumption of fats between 1971 and 1997.
The expending of fats is shown on the diagram above from 1971 to 1997 which includes
butter
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,
margarine
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, and low and reduced fat spreads .
Overall
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, there was a downward trend during 26 years in the consumption of
butter
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and
margarine
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with a slight decrease and
then
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a signifying rise in the amount of low-fat spreads people had.
Although
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margarine
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consumption faced a dropping from 1971 to 1976, it was still more popular than
butter
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over the period 1981 to 1995. The diagram
also
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presents there has been a consistent upswing in reduced fat spreads which started with 5 grams per person per week and
next,
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it reached 100 grams in 1997. Generally,
butter
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was the most wanted fat during those years
while
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people have not been fond of low-fat since 1971,
afterawhile
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after awhile
after a while
reduced fat spread consumption began in 1986,
while
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margarine
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and
butter
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usage
were
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still growing steadily.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Introduction: The introduction is missing.
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
Vocabulary: Replace the words butter, margarine with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reduced" was used 3 times.
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