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Nowadays people make new friends through social media and internet chat groups. Some people think it is a good idea. Other think that face to face interaction is essential. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There is no doubt that these days technology plays in several various nations the advancements in technology become issues globally . The question is there are some arguments to make
friends
 through social media
people
 are enjoying
to
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making
friends
 through various platforms
also
 some
people
 think that making
friends
 and communicating is the best way
face
 to
face
 . In
this
 essay , I am going to discuss both views and draw my personal opinion. In terms of positive side effects social media is huge than
face
to
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face
 makes
friends
 easily in different countries
people
 can interact at any time
moreover
,
people
 can learn more about another culture to have many different cultures. If you want to learn English it would be easier to speak in your native language.In other ,ways disadvantages make
friends
 through social media because we don’t know if the information about that person is real or fake it is the worst part to make
friends
.
However
 , make
friends
face to-
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face
face
 we can see their expressions and feelings I can see their reactions when they are angry, happy and sad which is knowing what should I do
also
 I will know if the
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was information
wasinformation
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 real to fake . The main reason given to support
this
 claim is that to know
this
 person in real life and to know closely about them
we
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 can hang out together is the best way
to
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 me . In ,conclusion
although
 make
friends
 through platforms you just don’t trust them don’t make real friendships just a person you want to learn from them .
Therefore
 if you
want
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 make
a
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real
friends
 just need to make
friends
face
 to
face
 .
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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