The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009.

The bar chart below shows shares of expenditures for five major categories in the United States, Canada, the United Kingdom, and Japan in the year 2009.
The line chart displays the consumption of food, housing, transportation, health care and clothing for four countries in 2009.
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, housing showed the highest and healthcare the lowest rate among
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different categories. The expenditures of
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the US
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, Canada, UK,
Japan
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and Japan
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on category housing were the largest. There is a 2 to 10 times difference between
housing
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the housing
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and health care category. For
food
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the food
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section
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the highest percentage was 23 which is Japan’s consumption. The least share belonged to the US.
Clothing
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The clothing
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and health care part illustrated the smallest activity among categories. The most
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on
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apply
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category
housing
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of housing
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is
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US, transportation -
Canada
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in Canada
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and food -
Japan
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in Japan
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.
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