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The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1

The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1
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The diagram illustrates the process of
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rain
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rainwater
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water
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 converting
as
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 drinking
water
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 in one of the cities of Australia as a cycle.
This
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 is a close and efficient system to use
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rain
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rainwater
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water
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.
Firstly
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, they collect
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rain
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water
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 from
buidings
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buildings
 where they have installed a
water
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 collecting system via tubes. These twin tubes
conect
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connect
connected
 together to the main large
water
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 tube and the collected
water
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 runs to the
water
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 filter. As the next step filtered
water
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store
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 in a large tank which has connected to the
water
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 treatment resioviour. In
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 step, some chemicals mix
to
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 the
water
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 to clear them as drinking
water
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Finally
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,
cleared
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water
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 supply
to
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the
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domestic use from the public
water
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 supply system. In
this
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gragram
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program
grogram
diagram
, it is very easy to understand the process of
water
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clearence
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clearance
 from
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water
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rain, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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