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The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1

The diagram below shows how rain water is collected and then treated to be used as drinking water in an Australian town. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words. Writing Task 1
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The diagram illustrates the process of
rain
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rainwater
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water
 converting
as
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into
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 drinking
water
 in one of the cities of Australia as a cycle.
This
 is a close and efficient system to use
rain
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rainwater
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water
.
Firstly
, they collect
rain
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rainwater
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water
 from
buidings
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buildings
 where they have installed a
water
 collecting system via tubes. These twin tubes
conect
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connect
connected
 together to the main large
water
 tube and the collected
water
 runs to the
water
 filter. As the next step filtered
water
store
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 in a large tank which has connected to the
water
 treatment resioviour. In
this
 step, some chemicals mix
to
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with
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 the
water
 to clear them as drinking
water
.
Finally
,
cleared
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water
 supply
to
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for
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the
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apply
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domestic use from the public
water
 supply system. In
this
gragram
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program
grogram
diagram
, it is very easy to understand the process of
water
clearence
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clearance
 from
rain
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rainwater
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water
.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words rain, water with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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