IELTS Writing Correction Service
Writing Samples
Band 5

Some people believe that visitors to other countries should follow local customs and behaviour. Others disagree and think that the host country should welcome cultural differences. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #visitors #countries #customs #behaviour #host #country #differences
✨ Do you want to improve your IELTS writing?
There is an opinion that tourists who go to visit different cultures should respect local traditions.
However
Linking Words
, some people hold the opposite view that the host nation should welcome cultural diversity. The objective of
this
Linking Words
 essay is to discuss both sides with relevant examples and state my own opinion.
To begin
Linking Words
 with, tourists from foreign nations should regard the country which they are visiting
due to
Linking Words
 the security of the local community.
In other words
Linking Words
, recreational activities which are done by foreigners may have an unpleasant impact on the traditional life of folks.
For instance
Linking Words
, the tribes of Amazonia do have no immunity to some diseases
such
Linking Words
 as cancer and diabetes which exist in our civilization.
Hence
Linking Words
, some tourists tend to break the laws and come too close to the locals which can be tremendously harmful to tribes.
As a result
Linking Words
, researchers have found that some of the tribe members got sick from
such
Linking Words
 interaction and some of the locals have already found cancer.
On the other hand
Linking Words
, others argue that
visitors
Use synonyms
 should be welcomed by the host country, regardless of cultural variety. The main reason why people take
this
Linking Words
 point of view is the beneficial impact on the tourism industry in
this
Linking Words
 particular nation. The influx of
visitors
Use synonyms
 has a positive impact on the local economy by giving workplaces for unemployed people and improving the economy. As an example, some
counties
Correct your spelling
countries
show examples
 in East Asia
such
Linking Words
 as Thailand live
due to
Linking Words
touristry
Correct your spelling
tourism
show examples
. Individuals get occupied because of touristry development and most income of the nation
due to
Linking Words
 tourism.
To conclude
Linking Words
, some individuals may find that
visitors
Use synonyms
 have a negative influence on folks because of their diseases. Others,
however
Linking Words
, believe that
visitors
Use synonyms
 should be welcomed despite the cultural
difference
Fix the agreement mistake
differences
show examples
. Because it boosts the local economy by giving workplaces for folks. I believe that we should regard local culture and pursue rules.
Submitted by shansharova.assel on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph relates to the main topic and supports the overall argument. Make sure to include a clear introduction and conclusion that summarize the main points.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples and develop your ideas further. Ensure that all ideas are directly relevant to the topic and clearly expressed.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural understanding
  • cultural harmony
  • local customs and behaviours
  • host country's traditions
  • unintentional offense
  • enhance the travel experience
  • cultural fabric
  • inclusive society
  • diverse society
  • global understanding
  • mutual respect
  • respect for local customs
What to do next:
Look at other essays: