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The three pie charts show the proportion of four kinds of vehicles used in the UK in 1996, 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant.

The three pie charts show the proportion of four kinds of vehicles used in the UK in 1996, 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given pie charts give
the
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information about the percentage of four distinct types of transportation utilization in the UK in 1996,1985 and 2005.
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, it can be clearly seen that private
cars
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 showed the biggest
propotion
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proportion
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 in all provided periods,
whereas
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recreational
vehicles
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 had the lowest percentage. In 1965, the number of British who use private
cars
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 accounted for 40%, followed by public transportation and lorries, at a fifth and a quarter respectively.
In addition
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, recreational
vehicles
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 became the least in
this
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 period, at 15%. In 1985, there were 55% of private
cars
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 were used in the UK.
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public transport and lorries had a similar number, at 20%,
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 there were only 5% of
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 prefered to choose recreational
vehicles
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. In the next two decades, the proportion of private
cars
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 increased slightly from
to
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three-fifths,
while
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 lorries declined from a fifth to 10%.
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, the percentage of public transport and recreational
vehicles
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 presented a minimal incline to 22% and 8% respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, vehicles with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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