The bar charts shows the details the percentage of two types of television programmes, namely reality and game shows watched by males and females in different age groups in Australia.

The given bar charts describe the percentage of two types of television programmes, namely reality and game shows watched by males and females

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different age groups in Australia.

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, the first percentage of who watch reality shows by men is 35% and women

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70%

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, the game show

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watched by male and women

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around 60%.

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number of people who see reality-based shows, in the age group between 16-24 is nearly 50%, in groups between 25-34 years is more than 60%, the community 35-44 is less than 70% and the public more than 45

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are watching more compare to other its 70%.

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, people who watch game shows are, groups between 16-24 watch 50%, society between 25-34 see less compare to other public, nation 35-44 watch 40% and years below 45 watch more than other classes. In conclusion, reality shows are more watched by female more. The above data show information about age between 16 and above.