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These days, more and more schools focus on science and social science subjects and choose not to teach children to sing, paint, sculpt, write creatively or dance. Should school-children study the arts?

Nowadays, in many countries around the world,
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children
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 to be taught more
science
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 and social
science
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subjects
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 than
arts
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such
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 as painting, singing, or dancing. In my opinion,
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 should
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 be given to the school program alongside
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science
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 and social
science
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subjects
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. Granted, one might argue that
science
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 and social
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subjects
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 the development of
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,
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 amount of knowledge to step into the modern world. Some people think that learning core
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 in school is adequate for
children
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 to grow up.
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 line of reasoning is not sound as
arts
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 help
children
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 to improve significant skills that bring practical benefit to their lives.
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, by studying art,
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 could have better creativity and expression. The
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 provide a platform for
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 to express themselves creatively, and
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creative thinking is essential for problem-solving and innovation in all areas of life.
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, if
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 is good at dancing, that one will be confident to be
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 at a party and may receive good feelings from those who
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 there. The main
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 that
children
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 study in school play a crucial role in a well-rounded education. It helps them get
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related professional knowledge in order to get higher education.
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,
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also
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 contribute to the holistic development of
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.
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helps
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 explore and understand their
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,
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, it brings them
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emotional intelligence.
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, by exposing
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arts
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 sooner, young people could not only improve
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 communication skills
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 but
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culture
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 awareness. Through art, they could learn to convey ideas, thoughts, and emotions in diverse ways. In conclusion,
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science
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 and social
science
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subjects
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 are undoubtedly important for developing critical thinking and problem-solving skills, the
arts
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 contribute to the
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, creative and
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 of student ‘s growth. An education that includes both disciplines equips
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 with
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 set of
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, enhancing their
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 them to navigate the complexities of
modern
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 world.

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