The bar chart below shows the percentage of New Zealand smokers in the age group 18-25 years, for the period 2014-2018.

New Zealand has taken reports of young generation smokers in which age group of 18-25. The bar chart below shows smokers for the period 2014-2018,

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E-cigarette smokers were lowest in the year 2014, somewhere around 2.5 per cent. Cigar percentage

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was the highest at 17.5 per cent by young adults. E-cigarettes had a stagnant increase after the year which reached a peak in 2018 of 17.5 per

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done by age groups between 18-25.

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cigarettes had 17.5 percentage users which slowly had a decline of users it reached 10 in the year 2018.

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The bar chart below shows the percentage of New Zealand smokers in the age group 18-25 years, for the period 2014-2018.

Increasing numbers of students are choosing to study abroad. To what extent does this trend benefit the students themselves and the countries involved? What are the drawbacks?

Some Some people fail to maintain balance with work and other aspects of life. What are the reasons for failure? How can it be solved?

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Some people think that it is more important to spend money on roads and motorways than on public transport systems such as railways and trams. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Some people believe that robots will play an important role in future societies, while others argue that robots might have negative effects on society. Discuss both views and give your opinion.