The bar chart below shows the percentage of New Zealand smokers in the age group 18-25 years, for the period 2014-2018.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of New Zealand smokers in the age group 18-25 years, for the period 2014-2018.
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New Zealand has taken reports of young generation smokers in which age group of 18-25. The bar chart below shows smokers for the period 2014-2018,
usage
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of Tobacco products
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as E-cigarettes, Cigarettes and Cigars. Gradually in
this
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period
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E-cigarette smokers were lowest in the year 2014, somewhere around 2.5 per cent. Cigar percentage
usage
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was 5 per cent,
whereas
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, Cigarette
usage
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was the highest at 17.5 per cent by young adults. E-cigarettes had a stagnant increase after the year which reached a peak in 2018 of 17.5 per
usage
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done by age groups between 18-25.
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cigarettes had 17.5 percentage users which slowly had a decline of users it reached 10 in the year 2018.
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