Task one( Test 10) The chart shows the proportion of working age adults in four countries from 1960 to 2015. Units are given in percentages. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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Overall
, there was a decreasing trend in all of
four countries in Change preposition
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working
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the working
age
population
.
In 1960, the percentage of the working
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working-age
age
population
was highest in Germany with
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at
the
just over 65, Correct article usage
apply
while
the lowest was in the United States with
roughly 60. In France and Change preposition
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Japan
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,Japan
this
percentage was somewhere between 60 and 65. Japan's working
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working-age
age
population
increased substantially and reached a peak of approximately 70 percent
in 1985 Change the spelling
per cent
then
it decreased substantially and finally
reached just over 50 percent
in 2050, which is the lowest among others. Germany Change the spelling
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also
saw fluctuations and reached a peak of roughly 70 percent
in 1990, Change the spelling
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then
it decreased too, but at slower
rate than Japan, and eventually ,in 2050, it was roughly 55 Add an article
a slower
percent
.
United state's working Change the spelling
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age
population
did not changed
a lot, with some fluctuations it came back to Change the verb form
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initial
position of 60 Add an article
the initial
an initial
percent
. Change the spelling
per cent
However
, overall
, France's working
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working-age
age
population
decreased, it reached a peak of just over 65 in 1990, then
decreased until 2050, in which it was just over 55 percent
.Change the spelling
per cent
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