The line graph below shows the population size, birth and death rate of England and Wales from 1700 to 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph below shows the population size, birth and death rate of England and Wales from 1700 to 2000.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The supplied data table describes the amount of
population
size,
birth
and
death
rates
on
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in
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England and Wales from 1700 to 2000. As a general trend, the
population
size
rate
increased overwhelmingly after the 19th century in England and Wales.
Moreover
, the
death
rates
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rate
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declined after 1800 started
while
the
birth
rate
after 1950 went upward.   It could be noticed that the
population
size
rate
of England and Wales started
approximately
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at approximately
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3
million
in 1700,
then
after 50 years the
population
rate
went as high as 10
million
. During the next 50
years
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the
population
rate
declined
nearly
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to nearly
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3
million
in 1800. Again after 50
years
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it increased from nearly 3
million
up to 10
million
in 1850.
Furthermore
, that year the
rate
rapidly increased
almost
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45
million
population
in 1900.
However
, in the following
centuries
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the
rate
reached 50
million
in 2000.   The
birth
rate
and
the
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death
followed a similar trend from 1700 to 1950.
In
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From
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1700 to 1750, an increase was seemed both these. The
birth
rate
rose from 30 to 40 per 1000
people
while
the
death
rate
increasing
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increased
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from around 27 to 37 per 1000
people
. From 1750 to 1800 the
rate
mode was steadiness
both
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in both
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of
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birth
and
death
rates
. After which there was a heavy fall with both
rates
reaching an all-time low of around 20 per thousand
people
by 1950. from that year, the faltering begins
which
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and
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the
birth
rate
climbs roughly 34 per 1000
people
in 2000,
instead
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,instead
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the
death
rates
were
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plateau from 1950 to 2000.  
Overall
,
population
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the population
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rate
was
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the
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started with the lowest number around 3
million
. It rocketed in three centuries,
which
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constituted 50
million
in 2000 with a stabilized period between 1750 to 1850 at 10
million
.
While
about
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the
birth
rate
and
death
rate
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,rate
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they were almost the same, in the
last
between 1950 to 2000 changes
have
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occurred.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words population, birth, death, rates, rate, million, people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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