Gender imbalance has long been a general phenomenon not only in the labour market but also in formal education. Some analysts argue that it is impossible to eliminate the underrepresentation of women in some subjects in the university. Do you agree or disagree?

Gender
inequality has existed long before and it still exists in the community one or the other way despite policy intervention in it. some commenter says that abandoning the social stigmatisation of
gender
bias would be difficult as it is
also
observed in some of the universities around the world. I do agree with the statement as it is more commonly experienced in the community
,
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when girls usually
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to perform the assigned tasks.
Gender
dominance by
men
has overtaken the job markets, which is the leading cause of
women
being treated inferior to
men
. When the girls are forgotten in the job market, they will be left behind as a housewife or some will be given low-paid jobs. In
this
situation
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women
have to be dependent
to
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their
husband
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at
home
becoming low self-esteem at
home
too.
For
instance
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if you are
downlooked
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by more people in society, what could be the result? your performance will just stick at
home
making leaving behind all the skills you have obtained. That's why the girls lose their opportunity outdoors.
However
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there are ways and strategies to overcome
such
mishaps in the society.
Firstly
revise the curriculum in the schools and colleges that are free from
gender
bias. Making a learning environment free from sexual
stereotype
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for students will bring great change for upcoming youths.
Secondly
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government should take responsibility for equity among
men
and
women
at the state level.
For example
offering
an
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equal job opportunities to both
men
and
women
, so that the
women
raise their shoulders against the
men
, gaining equal responsibility at
home
too. In conclusion, with the existence of
gender
inequality since the early period, it will be challenging to overcome. Even
then
, putting efforts from the policy level to self-awareness would minimise the prevalence of
gender
imbalance in society.
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