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The percentage of people who were born in Australia and who were born outside Australia living in urban, rural and town between 1995 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting this main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given bar chart compares three different places inside and outside
Australia
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, namely cities, towns, and rural areas, in terms of changes in the proportion of
people
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 who are given
birth
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 at two specific timelines.
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, the statistic of
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 who are born
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 cities in 1995 witnessed an upward trend over a period of 15 years.
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, there was a downward trend
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 newborn babies in town between 1995 and 2010. As can be seen from the chart, in 1995,
people
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 born in
Australia
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 and outside
Australia
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 were the highest figures, accounting for 50
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percent
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 and 60
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, respectively. Not only was the ratio highest in 1995
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 but
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 the percentage who were born in cities in 2010.
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, there were few marginal developments in terms of
people
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 who were given
birth
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 both inside and outside
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 nation, in 2010,
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 up around 65
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 and 80
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, for each. A striking feature is that the percentage of
new born
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 babies outside
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 of 80
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 in 2010. There was an
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 downward trend in figures for all levels of giving
birth
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 in other groups
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 as towns and rural areas throughout the period shown . It can be observed clearly that the giving
birth
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 rates both inside and outside
Australia
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 declined moderately, from approximately 20 and 12
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 to 18 and 16
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, respectively.
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, a noticeable feature is the proportion of
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 who are born in rural areas outside
Australia
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 was recorded at 40
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, but
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 in 2010, it is followed by a plummet to only 5
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.
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