The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.) Describe the information presented below, comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.

The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.)

Describe the information presented below, comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.
The supplied diagram illustrates the average time spent by unpaid workers per
week
and they are divided into two gender categories.
Overall
, it is obvious that married females do unpaid
work
more than married males and
while
women's trend considerably rises, men have a downward tendency. As is presented in the diagram wedded females without
children
have 30
hors
Correct your spelling
hours
of
work
per
week
,
it
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which
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is less than other married women
which
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who
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have
children
. Meanwhile,
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the male's
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male's
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male
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trend goes
on the contrary
to women's and men without any kid
work
for free
approximately
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for approximately
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19 hours a
week
,
however
, them having
a
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children
a child
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children
reduces their
work
hours.
Furthermore
,
female
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,female
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which
has
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have
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a
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apply
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3+
children
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child
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works twice much time
than
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as
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that who has no
children
as 60 hours per
week
, comparatively to men with 3+
children
it is 3 times more.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words week, work, children with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "diagram" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • unpaid work
  • categories
  • average hours
  • men
  • women
  • comparison
  • overview
  • highest
  • differences
  • reasons
  • childcare
  • housework
  • gardening
  • gender roles
  • societal expectations
  • cultural norms
  • work-life balance
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