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The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.) Describe the information presented below, comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.

The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.) Describe the information presented below, comparing results for men and women in the categories shown. Suggest reasons for what you see.
#hours #work #week #people #categories #activities #childcare #home #housework #information #results #men #women
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The bar chart provides information on the average number of
hours
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 married
men
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 and
women
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 use to do jobs that do not offer any form of salary in seven days.
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, married females do the most
work
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 in all three categories
while
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 married males with or without any
children
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 do the same
hours
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 of
work
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. In terms of spouses with no
children
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, the
women
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 perform 30
hours
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 of
work
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 in the week;
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,
men
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's average time spent doing
work
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 without pay is just over half what the
hours
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women
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 spend (18).
Women
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 who are married with one to two
children
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 waste approximately 51
hours
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 doing activities like helping them with homework or babysitting which is almost three times higher than
men
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 in
this
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 same category.
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, married
women
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 with three or more
children
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 take the lead among their other counterparts by spending 60
hours
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 per week doing housework
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 as gardening and assisting with their
children
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's schoolwork
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 the
men
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 with three-plus
children
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 still stay below 20
hours
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 per week.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, men, women, work, children with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • unpaid work
  • categories
  • average hours
  • men
  • women
  • comparison
  • overview
  • highest
  • differences
  • reasons
  • childcare
  • housework
  • gardening
  • gender roles
  • societal expectations
  • cultural norms
  • work-life balance
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