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You recently moved house and you used a removal Company to help you move your belongings. However, some of your things were damaged in the move. Write a letter to the manager of the removal company. In your letter, •Give details of the move •Describe the damage • Say what you would like the manager to do.

Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
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 letter to express my dissatisfaction
about
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with
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 the moving service I
took
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received
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of
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from
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 your company. I
live
Wrong verb form
have lived
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 in Muzaffarnagar for the
last
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 12 years with my family. Recently, I shifted to Gurgaon
due to
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 my job.
However
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, all of my belongings were in my hometown.
Therefore
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, I decided to take
Correct article usage
the service
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service
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services
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 of your company to move things from my place to an apartment in Gurgaon. Later, I found out some of my books were damaged and a few were missing as well. I called the driver to inquire about it and
got
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found
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 to
know
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apply
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that he was driving at high speed and applied brakes on a turn
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due
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, due
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 to which the carton containing books fell out of the vehicle. I would like to recommend that the company
keeps
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keep
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 a check on the driving skills
as well as
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 the personality traits of the drivers
while
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 hiring them.
Additionally
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, charging them with a fine in
such
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 incidents will make them more cautious at work. Yours faithfully, Divya Madan

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task
Task response: State clearly what you want from the company. Give exact date of the move, a list of damaged items, and the amount of compensation you seek. This makes your request easy to act on.
coherence
Coherence: Write in a clear order. Open with a short note of the move, then describe the damage, then state what you want. Use a new paragraph for each idea.
format
The letter uses a proper greeting and closing.
content
The writer explains what happened and what damaged items are.
style
The tone is polite and formal.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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