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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas (1999 & 2004) Coffee UK Switzerland Denmark Belgium Sweden Bananas Switzerland UK Belgium Sweden Denmark 1999 (millions of euros) 1.5 3 1.8 1 0.8 1999 (millions of euros) 15 1 0.6 1.8 2 2004 (millions of euros) 20 6 2 1.7 1 2004 (millions of euros) 47 5.5 4 1 0.9

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas (1999 & 2004) Coffee UK Switzerland Denmark Belgium Sweden Bananas Switzerland UK Belgium Sweden Denmark 1999 (millions of euros) 1.5 3 1.8 1 0.8 1999 (millions of euros) 15 1 0.6 1.8 2 2004 (millions of euros) 20 6 2 1.7 1 2004 (millions of euros) 47 5.5 4 1 0.9
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, coffee, bananas, millions, euros, amount with synonyms.
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