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The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. Sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas (1999 & 2004) Coffee UK Switzerland Denmark Belgium Sweden Bananas Switzerland UK Belgium Sweden Denmark 1999 (millions of euros) 1.5 3 1.8 1 0.8 1999 (millions of euros) 15 1 0.6 1.8 2 2004 (millions of euros) 20 6 2 1.7 1 2004 (millions of euros) 47 5.5 4 1 0.9

The tables below give information about sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countries. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. Sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas (1999 & 2004) Coffee UK Switzerland Denmark Belgium Sweden Bananas Switzerland UK Belgium Sweden Denmark 1999 (millions of euros) 1.5 3 1.8 1 0.8 1999 (millions of euros) 15 1 0.6 1.8 2 2004 (millions of euros) 20 6 2 1.7 1 2004 (millions of euros) 47 5.5 4 1 0.9
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The table below shows us
detalis
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details
 about
sales
 of Fairtrade-labelled
coffee
 and
bananas
 in 1999 and 2004 in the five countries .
Overall
,
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the
coffee
 and banana
sales
 in Switzerland
was
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 in the lead in 1999 . Switzerland with 3
millions
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euros
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the
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Denmark with 1.8
euros
 have the most
coffee
sales
 in the 1999s ,
Although
 Swizweland has
also
 the most
bananas
sales
 in 1999 with 15
millions
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euros
 and the lowest productive country was Belgium with 0.6
millions
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 in 2004 the UK has the most
amount
 of
coffee
sales
 with 20
millions
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euros
 ,
on the other
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 Sweden got the lowest
amount
 of money with 1 million .
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 Denmark got the lowest
amount
 of
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bananas
sales
 with 0.9
millions
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million
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,
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 Switzerland had a huge jump
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bananas
sales
 in 2004 with 47
millions
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 and it was the highest
amount
 of all the 5 countries .
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