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At an event you attended recently, you met an employee of a company you would like to work at. You talked to her and she suggested that you should contact her if you needed any help with your job application. Write a letter to this employee. In your letter: • remind her how you met and ask for some help • tell her what kind of job you are interested in • ask her about the company’s job application process

Mr Anna I am the person
who
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apply
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you met in the showroom in Philadelphia
while
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 you were searching for a shirt
for
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as
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 a gift. I am glad to meet you. When we were
talking
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talking,
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 you
know
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told
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 me about an employee in your company. I am really keen on working in your company and would be great if you could help me. I am
interesting
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interested
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 in the work of farm and I love
countryside
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the countryside
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. When I was a
child
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child,
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 I spent a lot of time working on my grandfather´s farm
and
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, and
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 he
made
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taught
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 me
know
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apply
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all about animals and their care.
Thus
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, I have had experience in
this
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 job
and
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, and
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 at the moment I am working on a farm in the north of Argentina. I would like to know how
is
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apply
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the job application process
.
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is.
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 In
Argentina
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Argentina,
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they
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there
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 are not many requirements to cover
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although
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, although
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 I have
aptitude
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the aptitude
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 to apply to any job related to land. Thanks for taking the time to read my letter
I
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. I
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hope to see you soon. Best regards

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structure
Make the aim clear at the start. Say who you are and why you write.
coherence
Keep each paragraph about one idea. Use short, clear sentences.
grammar
Correct grammar and use simple forms. For example, say 'I am interested in farm work' and 'How does the job process work?'.
presentation
Use a proper greeting and closing. Show your name in the end.
length
Be brief and to the point. Do not add too much extra details.
content
Polite tone and clear request for help.
content
Shows your background and interest to work in the company.
content
Asks about the company’s job process.
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