The pie charts give information about the proportoin males and females in employment in six categories divided into manualand non-manual occupations
The pie chart illustrates figures for men and women performing in six types of handwork and non-handwork occupations.
Overall
, managerial and professional were have the Largest percentage in both, while
the other manual has nearly the same shart in female and male. In contrast
the general labourers it a small segment
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the proportion of females,clerical or related have the biggest fraction at 31 percent
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In addition
, managerial and professional, and other manual represents 29% and 29% respectively. while
the general and labourers, craft, and other non-manual collectively comprised less than a fifth.
On the other hand
, the manual categories of males like a graft of similar and other manuals they have just a half in the graph. In terms of percentage ,managerial it
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Finally
, the rest have almost 14 per cent.Submitted by Layla on
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