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The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table depicts the of
women
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 in per cent in positions of senior management in three different organizations between 1975 and 2015.
Overall
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, the most
women
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 who participated in senior management positions were from Eldan Ltd (64%) in 2015. In Bamforth, 46% of the designations were
women
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 in the same year which was the company's highest recorded.
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, Finsbury followed the trend, by assigning 26% of
women
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 in 2015 to top positions.
Furthermore
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, the data noted shows that in 1975, Eldan and Bamforth appointed 3%( the least) and 9% respectively the lowest in each of the companies. An anomaly observed was that Finsbury designated 16%
women
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 in the first year and over half a decade it dropped to a mere 14%.
Subsequently
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, a trend noticed is that these three companies involved more
women
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 over the years. Ironically, the least number and the most
women
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 were from the same company
that is
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 Eldan in 1975 and 2015 respectively.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words women with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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