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The pie chart below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in UK in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in UK in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart gives information about the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in the United Kingdom in 2002.
Overall
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, the proportion of people from each household type
is not balance
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 with sole Parents accounting percentage the highest and aged Couples accounting percentage the lowest. It can be seen from the pie chart that people living in poverty with the top sole parents have a percentage of 26%, the next is single without
children
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 with 24%, couples with
children
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 with 15%, following is all households with 14%, and the rest accounting less than
such
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 as
couple
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 without
children
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 with 9%, single aged persons with 7% and the
last
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 is aged
couple
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 with 5%. From an
overall
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 perspective, it is clear sole parents huge difference
with
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from
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 aged Couples. What a surprise when a
couple
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 without
children
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 is higher than a
couple
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 with
children
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "overall".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words children, couple with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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