The graph below shows in proportion trends the changing patterns of domestic acces to modern technology in homes in the UK.

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The graph below shows in proportion trends the changing patterns of domestic

acces

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access

to modern technology in homes in the UK. We met a CD player, Mobile phone, Home computer and Internet

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access

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diagram between 1996/97 and 2002/03 periods.

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, the CD player

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1996/97 terms and gradually increased. The

percentages

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this

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option is 60%-80%. The top of the highest point is 82%.

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we indicated Home computer. It commenced at the same time with

Mobile

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phone and CD player. Home

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increased progressively in the middle of 22%-57%.

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, Mobile phone uses fluctuated wildly, but the trend was upward.

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, other patterns had

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starting term.

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, there

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Internet

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from 1998/99 intervals.

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pattern was rapidly

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compared to others. About 7%-42%

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The graph below shows in proportion trends the changing patterns of domestic acces to modern technology in homes in the UK.

Some people believe that everyone has a right to have access to university education, and that governments should make it free for students, no matter what financial bike round they have. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

hese days, many people have their own computer and telephone, so it is quite easy for them to do their job at home. Does working at home have more advantages or more disadvantages?

You are looking for a full-time job. Write a letter to an employment agency. In your letter: introduce yourself explain what sort of job you would like say what experience and skills you have

Food can be produced much more cheaply today because of improved fertilizers and better machinery. however ,some of the method used to do this may be dangerous to human health and may have negative effects on local communities to what extent do you you agree or disagree?

In many countries, more and more people choose to buy imported food rather than food produced locally. Why people buy imported food? What could be done to encourage people to buy local food?