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The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.

The bar chart below shows the percentage of Australian men and women in different age groups who did regular physical activity in 2010.
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statistical
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represetation
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representation
representations
, of Regular physical activity in 2010 done by different
age
 groups of Australian
men
 and
women
.
Overall
,
The
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women
 more participation in regular physical activity in the 45 to 54
age
bracket
on the other hand
 in the 15 to 24
age
group
heighest
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highest
men
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number of men
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 are participate.
noteably
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notably
 that a higher percentage of
women
 than
men
 exercised in all types of
age
 groups. 47.7%
females
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of females
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 perform exercise in
lowest
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the lowest
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age
bracket
 . The participants increased gradually increased with
the
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age
 and reach its peak
53.3
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of 53.3
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%
on
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in
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 the 45 to 54
age
group
. Above that it started to drop off. In the
heighest
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highest
age
group
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 only 47.1%
women
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of women
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 left who
exercising
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exercised
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 regularly. Male Participants are highest in the lowest
Age
 which is 52.8%. The gradually decrease
till
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 the 35 to 44
age
bracket
 which is
also
lowest
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the lowest
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 percentage of
men
 only 39.5%. than increase a little bit by increasing the
age
 and reach 47.1% in
65
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the 65
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 and above
age
bracket
.
This
 rate is very close to that of
female
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females
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 in the same
age
group
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Physical activity
  • Regular exercise
  • Age demographics
  • Participation rate
  • Trend analysis
  • Gender disparity
  • Health initiatives
  • Public health policies
  • Statistical comparison
  • Lifestyle choices
  • Work commitments
  • Age-related factors
  • Preventative health
  • Exercise habits
  • Surveillance data
  • Motivators and barriers
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