The pie chart below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in UK in 2002. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the proportion of different categories of families living in poverty in UK in 2002.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart outlines the percentages of poor family
types
in the United Kingdom in 2002. Generally speaking, 14%
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households were insolvent in 2002 and half of those poor families were sole parents and singles without any child. As can be seen, 26%
sole
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parents in the United Kingdom were economically insolvent in 2002 and
this
was the highest ratio for the poor British family
types
.
Poverty
was prevalent among the singles without children as 24% of them were under the
poverty
line. These two
types
of households accounted for half of the total
poverty
-stricken families in the UK in 2002. Couples with children had
greater
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poverty
rate than couples without children.
While
the 15%
former
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family
types
witnessed economic misfortune, the latter accounted for 9% of
such
households. It is worth noticing that ages British had fewer
poverty
rates than their younger counterparts. One in twenty aged couples had to go through financial hardships
while
it was 7% for the single aged person.
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