Methods of transporation for people travelling to one university for work or study in 2004 and 2009 in the UK. The two pie charts compare five categories of UK travelling percentage of university (train, bicycle, bus, walking, car,) from 2004 to 2009) Units are measured in proportion.

Methods of transporation for people travelling to one university for work or study in 2004 and 2009 in the UK.

 The two pie charts compare five categories of UK travelling percentage of university (train, bicycle, bus, walking, car,) from 2004 to 2009) Units are measured in proportion.
The pie chart
show
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the
datas
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data
of
variety
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a variety
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kind
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of kind
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of transportation for
people
travelling to one college for either work or study in 2 different years, 200 and 2009 in British.
Overall
, it is noticeable that trains, one of the transportation have been used the least
while
car or bus took the most transport being used by peoples. In the year
of
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2004, the figure gives information that
car
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cars
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have been the
methods
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method
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of transportation that
people
commonly used, accounting for 51%, more than half of the pie chart. Followed by bus with lower than the previous transport 18%.
Bicycle
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The bicycle
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was rarely
being
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used with just 9%,
people
who prefer
walked
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to walk
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to
office
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the office
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or work and
people
who used
train
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the train
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have
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approximately each
others
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other
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, with
1
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a 1
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% difference, 4% and 3% each. 5 years later,
2009
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in 2009
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. The percentages for each have fluctuated. The most used vehicle
belong
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to
bus
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the bus
a bus
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, it took 46%, an rapidly increased. Next was
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a car
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car
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cars
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with 28%,
an
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fast dropped. Surprisingly,
bicycle
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bicycles
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took
the
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apply
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third place with
6
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a 6
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% difference from the year 2004. The walking method and
train
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training
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still approximately with 6% and 4%, they have increased, but not a big jump
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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