Big salary is much more important than job satisfaction. Do you agree or disagree? Provide relevant examples if necessary.

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Nowadays big
salary
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and
job
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satisfaction is a paramount issue
that is
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getting worse and worse.A significant amount of
people
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believes
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that
big
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a big
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salary
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is more important than
jon
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job
satisfaction
however
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I strongly believe that,
job
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satisfaction is much more important than your big
salary
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. I would argue that if someone does not enjoy
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their
work
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that’s
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mean that he cannot earn enough
money
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due to
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he
do
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not want to
their
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business. To kick things off, the
work
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we will do after graduating
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is paramount important because of our business life.
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, a person who does not like her
job
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cannot gain enough
money
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.
For instance
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, there are some
people
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who think that if I enter a successful
bussines
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business
I will have a big
salary
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however
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it is not like that there are
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variety of
people
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who do what they
into
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are into
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and have a
salary
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. On
the
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top of that, If you want to have a good
job
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, you have to
work
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for it first and
then
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improve yourself so you have to
work
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and earn
money
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then
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you have to save it .In my experience, there's nothing
people
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won't do for
money
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, so they choose which
job
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will make them
money
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rather than what they love to do. In conclusion, business and
earn
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money
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is the biggest problem of these times so it is always more advantageous for you to do the
job
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you love and earn
money
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.I am sure that anyone who finds the right
job
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for herself will have
money
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.
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  • luxuries
  • material possessions
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