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The line graph below illustrates the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton over a period of 30 years between 1980 and 2010.

The line graph below illustrates the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton over a period of 30 years between 1980 and 2010.
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qualities
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quality
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 of visitors to the UK for some
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types
 of
the
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apply
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attractions in Brighton from 1980 to 2010.
Overall
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a smallet
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smallet
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smallest
small
 minority of the total to
pier
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the pier
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.
However
, to
pavilion
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the pavilion
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, art
gelleres
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galleries
 and festivals
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aproximately
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approximately
same
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the same
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 qualities.
It is clear that
pier
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the pier
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 was out of favour for
tourist
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tourists
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 in 1980(10%).By applying the contrast, festivals
was
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 virtually
biggest
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the biggest
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atrractions
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attractions
attraction
 with 30% in 1980.
Although
, art
galleres
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galleries
 took just 22% in 1980.
While
,
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apply
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 pavilions
atractions
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attractions
 was begin in 1980 from 23%
then
 by far surged to just 48% after
15-year
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15 years
 and ended
31
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at 31
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%
in
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 the end of the period.
Whereas
, pier
atractions
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attractions
was
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were
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 completed with 22% in 2010.
Although
, art
gellery
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gallery
 gradually increased to the top 35% in 1985 and ended with 9%.
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