The line graph below illustrates the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton over a period of 30 years between 1980 and 2010.

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qualities

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quality

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of visitors to the UK for some

tipe

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types

the

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attractions in Brighton from 1980 to 2010.

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, applying

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a smallet

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smallet

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smallest

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minority of the total to

pier

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the pier

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, to

pavilion

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the pavilion

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, art

gelleres

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galleries

and festivals

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aproximately

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approximately

same

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the same

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qualities.

It is clear that

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pier

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the pier

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was out of favour for

tourist

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tourists

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in 1980(10%).By applying the contrast, festivals

was

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virtually

biggest

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the biggest

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atrractions

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attractions

attraction

with 30% in 1980.

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, art

galleres

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galleries

took just 22% in 1980.

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pavilions

atractions

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attractions

was begin in 1980 from 23%

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by far surged to just 48% after

15-year

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15 years

and ended

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at 31

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the end of the period.

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, pier

atractions

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attractions

was

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completed with 22% in 2010.

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, art

gellery

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gallery

gradually increased to the top 35% in 1985 and ended with 9%.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 8.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

127 words

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The line graph below illustrates the percentage of tourists to England who visited four different attractions in Brighton over a period of 30 years between 1980 and 2010.

Some people think that success in life comes from hard work and determination while others think that there are more important factors such as money and appearances. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Environmental protection is the responsibility of politicians, not individuals as individuals can do too little. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some people think that newspaper are best media to learn and get information from, while others believe that internet is a better source.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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