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Traffic and accomodation problems are increasing and government should encourage some businesses to move from cities to rural areas. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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Traffic
 and housing issues are raising and authorities should motivate some
businesses
 to relocate from urban to agricultural
areas
.
Although
this
trend
 can bring drawbacks for rural
areas
 including,
create
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creating
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 pollution, and housing
promlems
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problems
 In my opinion the merits of
this
trend
 outweigh
demerits
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the demerits
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 because
this
trend
 can contribute to
mitigate
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mitigating
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traffic
 congestion
as well as
accomodation
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accommodation
 problems. On the one hand. The primary downside of
encrouaging
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encouraging
 some
businesses
 to move to rural
areas
 is can create air pollution. To illustrate, some factories burn fossil fuel to order to run their factories, which
mean
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means
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 people who live countryside will suffer from air contamination.
Therefore
, people in
countryside
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the countryside
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 will become more vulnerable to
get
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getting
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 serious diseases namely, cancer, asthma, and brain stroke result of pollution.
On the other hand
, I would like to argue the benefits of
encourage
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encouraging
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 some
businesses
 to move from urban to rural
areas
more
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are more
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 significant than
downsides
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the downsides
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. The first advantage of
this
trend
 can tackle
issue
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the issue
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 of
traffic
 jams in
cities
.
This
 is because some business with their employees will migrate to rural
areas
, which mean less population in
cities
.
Consequently
,
less
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fewer
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 inhabitants in urban
areas
 mean less number of vehicles , which
mean
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means
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 less
traffic
 congestion. Addressing
accomodation
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accommodation
 problems is another benefit of
this
trend
. To illustrate, moving some
business
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businesses
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 to rural
areas
 can contribute to
reduce
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reducing
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 the population in
cities
.
As a result
,
less
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fewer
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 inhabitants in
cities
 mean more homes will become available for people with affordable prices.
To sum up
,
Although
 incentive
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for
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some
businesses
 to move from
cities
 to agricultural
areas
 can bring disadvantages for rural
areas
 namely , create air contamination, and housing issues from my perspective the upsides of
this
trend
 greater outweigh
downsides
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the downsides
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 because
this
trend
 can contribute to
alleviate
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alleviating
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traffic
 congestion
as well as
 accomodation problems result of minimize the population in
cities
.
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