Nowadays, many
people
choose to live in
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city or near business
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due to
time efficiency. There is an idea of moving several business
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to
suburbsCorrect article usage
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, and they
concernAdd a missing verb
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about the hard access to
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.
However
, I hold the view that the merits outweigh the demerits.
On the one hand, business
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in
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will slowly destroy
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, especially the factory of textile. The waste give a huge contribution and
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to severe problems,
likewise
flood, air pollution, and water pollution.
Therefore
, the individuals' quality of life might decrease as their
environment
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by
. Bogor,
for instance
, has a village with
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clear air, but it changes when factories
in that village.
Consequently
, it
worsenChange the verb form
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not only the transportation access
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but
also
the
environment
.
On the other hand
,
this
idea is important
toChange preposition
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balancing the number of
people
who live in cities.
In addition
, the number of population who live in
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area
is increaseChange the verb form
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steadily, as it is the main income resource. If the government establish
this
policy,
people
would have a peaceful
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since they can live in
suburbsCorrect article usage
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.
Moreover
, the society there would be empowered and could work near their home, which can
thus
decliningChange the verb form
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the number of
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who came to
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.
In conclusion,
although
companies'
buildingFix the agreement mistake
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have
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possibilitiesFix the agreement mistake
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to worsen the
environment
, it would give
people
in the
suburbs
the
opportunitiesFix the agreement mistake
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to gain huge income. I
firmlyAdd a missing verb
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convinceChange the form of the verb
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that the government should legalize
this
policy, and establish strict rules for the employees so that they could not harm the
environment
.