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the chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010

the chart shows the percentage of male and female teachers in six different types of educational setting in the UK in 2010
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The bar chart demonstrates the proportion of male and female
teachers
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 in six divided types of educational background in the UK in 2010. In Nursery/Pre-
school
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, a large percentage of
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 were female, with approximately 97%, and 3% of
teachers
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 were men. The account of female
teachers
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 was more than 30 times that of male
teachers
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. In Primary
school
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, male
teachers
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 only accounted for 8%, and female
teachers
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 still took a big proportion, with 92%. But in
University
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the University
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, the
number
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 of male
teachers
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was
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clearly exceeded
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the
number
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 of female
teachers
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. 70% of the
teachers
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 there were men, and female
teachers
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 were only 30%. At the same time, there was not a big difference between the
number
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 of male
teachers
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 and female
teachers
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 in Secondary
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school
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schools
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,
College
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Colleges
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, and Private training
institute
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. The proportion of female
teachers
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 was 3% more than male
teachers
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 in Secondary
school
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,
with53
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with 53
%. And in
Private
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a Private
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 training
school
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, the situation was exactly the opposite of
Secondary
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a Secondary
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school
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. College almost had the same account of male
teachers
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 and female
teachers
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, with 50%. In conclusion, the
number
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 of male teacher and female
teachers
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 were unbalanced, and Nursery/
Pre-
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preschool
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school
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, Primary
achool
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school
 and Secondary
school
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 had more female
teachers
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, and Private training
institiute
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institute
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 and University had more male
teachers
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.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words teachers, school, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • educational settings
  • percentage
  • representation
  • disparities
  • predominance
  • gender imbalance
  • societal expectations
  • historical roles
  • implications
  • trends
  • gender gap
  • educational outcomes
  • gender stereotypes
  • policies
  • initiatives
  • perceptions
  • effectiveness
  • primary school
  • secondary school
  • nursery
  • university
  • further education
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